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11 June 2013 @ 02:09 pm
Unmendable  
Author: donutsweeper
Title: Unmendable
Rating: G
Pairing: None
Character: Balinor
Summary: Alone and broken is no way to live.
Warnings: None
Word Count: 100
Prompt: #61 Broken

Balinor was the last of his kind, alive only by the grace of a dear friend. On the run, empty and broken, the mere act of existing day to day almost too much for him. Uther's betrayal had cut him so deeply he thought that he could have nothing, no one, ever again, but he was wrong. He found himself a good woman, one who loved him despite his issues, and he began rebuilding his life.

Then Uther's men found him. Forced to flee again, alone again, it was only then he discovered how truly broken a man could become.
 
 
 
rotruderotrude on June 11th, 2013 08:40 pm (UTC)
So perfect! I adore this take on Balinor!
donutsweeper: merlin and arthurdonutsweeper on June 11th, 2013 09:23 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
47eleven: Arthur47eleven on June 12th, 2013 04:34 am (UTC)
Great!
donutsweeper: merlin and arthurdonutsweeper on June 12th, 2013 04:38 am (UTC)
Thank you! :)
alba: Merlin Merlin Arthur finalealba17 on June 12th, 2013 10:39 am (UTC)
Oh, very good.
donutsweeper: merlin and arthurdonutsweeper on June 12th, 2013 02:35 pm (UTC)
Glad you liked it!
afleur_de_lis on June 12th, 2013 02:40 pm (UTC)
Balinor is one of those tragic characters, isn't he? I really liked him despite the fact that he died the moment I began liking him.

Well, anyway onto the review!

I really liked your take on Balinor. I loved how you made him to be so broken and lonely. His thoughts on Uther's betrayal and how much it hurt him was especially a favourite moment.

"It was only then he discovered how truly broken a man could become."

That last bit was absolutely beautiful! If you wanted the reader to whimper, you achieved that with that last sentence.

Great job!
donutsweeperdonutsweeper on June 12th, 2013 04:53 pm (UTC)
Wow, what a wonderful comment. Thank you so much, I'm glad this worked for you so well.
archaeologist_d: Merlin Emrysarchaeologist_d on June 12th, 2013 09:11 pm (UTC)
I loved how you wrote Balinor. The poor man seemed incredibly lonely in the show and you captured it very well.
donutsweeper: merlin and arthurdonutsweeper on June 12th, 2013 09:37 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
brunettepetbrunettepet on June 14th, 2013 09:48 am (UTC)
It's tragic that Balinor, having just begun to rebuild his life, has it wrested from him once more. It's even more tragic because although he's lost so much he's lost even more than he knows. Nicely done.
donutsweeperdonutsweeper on June 14th, 2013 02:39 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much, Balinor is one of those characters that just *got* to me on the show and I'm glad I could bring those feelings across in my fic.